#10 is

Doubtful, so prove it please; my impression is that a random spray of particles in all directions would repel electrons as much as protons, unless the spray were not random.

- #10 seems Not vital for his model.

 

#13a is

Untrue and Contradicts Battery Circuit paper which starts at #16.

- #13a seems Not vital either.

 

#13b-15

Contradict Battery Circuit paper.

- #13-15 seems Important to clarify, because the mechanism is different from that in the Battery Circuit paper.

 

#21 is

True, but it contradicts 13a.

- #21 seems Not vital.

 

#26 is

Unclear, the wire isn't ionized, is it?

- #26 seems Important to help clarity.

 

#28:

I think it does separate ions from electrons, doesn't it?

- #28 seems Not vital.

 

#30:

Please specify which ions are large and small in batteries. Is it protons and electrons?

- #30 seems Not vital.

 

#34:

The description that follows 35 doesn't seem clear enough for me.

- #34 seems Important to help clarity.

 

Others' comments are needed too.